You'll always be a part of our lives.
It makes me sad to say our 'byes.'
Thank you for the amazing times.
You always stood by everyone.
And you always made my day.
Your heart was a big, bright sun,
brightening everyone's path, by what you say.
You saved my life,
and the lives of others.
You will never ever fade away.
You are like all the mothers,
Even though you are gone, and you can not say
We know you will love us from far away.
Although we lost the great big sun,
The time will go, but there will still be tears,
From your presence, we will never run.
You will be remembered, for years and years.
You are the heart within,
Capturing everyone else's.
Because of you, we have learned our sin,
Now, I would like to say,
you changed us all.
a. form is wrong, need quatrain stanzas(4lines) also the rhyme scheme should remain to be ABAB
ReplyDeleteb. thematically it shows you miss someone who has left forever and praise for his/her influence in life.